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I sing his name softly as I sleep,
hearing echoes of him while I dream,
my thoughts in slumber like a tumbling stream,
his syllables bring calmness to the deep.
I sing his name quietly in my days,
a constant sountrack to my own existence;
knowing however far or near the distance
he's lighting my life with the brightest rays.
I sing him, dreaming, waking, in-between.
I sing him while I daydream, my sweet dove
who fills my life so fully with his love
that keeps my heart alive, and pure, and clean.
If life's a journey through the mists of time,
may his ever fall step-by-step with mine.
hearing echoes of him while I dream,
my thoughts in slumber like a tumbling stream,
his syllables bring calmness to the deep.
I sing his name quietly in my days,
a constant sountrack to my own existence;
knowing however far or near the distance
he's lighting my life with the brightest rays.
I sing him, dreaming, waking, in-between.
I sing him while I daydream, my sweet dove
who fills my life so fully with his love
that keeps my heart alive, and pure, and clean.
If life's a journey through the mists of time,
may his ever fall step-by-step with mine.
Here, have some badly-forced rhymes and a whole lot of love.
© 2013 - 2024 quenjamin
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactThis is a beautifully written piece. Personally it makes me think of a break-up in a relationship where the person of who's viewpoint this is written in is still in love with their other half. This piece has a lot of emotive content which works extremely well in portraying the love that you still hold for the person. This piece has allowed me to literally see into your world and feel the emotions that you are feeling which is key in this type of writing and you should be proud that you have managed to effectively personify these emotions. The structure of the piece flows very well and is easy to read and the rhyme is not only effective but well chosen.